英语作文不太会写，写了一篇，高分虚心学习请教各位。

首先，格式上，大体正确。但需注意，英文是不空格的，不像中文，另起一段要空两格。。。所以，第一段必须顶格写！
其次，这种作文，看来是国内考试的作文。写这种作文，需要进可能的包含给你的全部中文信息，不要逐条翻译，但最好不要遗漏，尤其不能遗漏重要的信息！除此之外，一篇高分的作文，还应该有作者自己的观点，一些扩展等等。不要多，但是要有。不能单纯翻译文本。
从楼主给的文章来看，楼主的英文功底不是很好，有一些语法错误，一些习惯用法也不是很了解。
已经有了文本，我就不重新写了，帮你修改一下吧。

Dear dad and mum,
As you have already known, I will graduate from college in this July. I should have been very happy because I will have an ideal job soon since I graduate from a famous college and I performd very well at school. However, there will be more than six million graduates this year and considering the financial crisis, it must be very difficult to find a good job. Up to now, I have attended many job fairs but I cannot find my dream job. Anyway, do not worry. I will try my best to make it. I just write to you to let you know that I am fine.
Sincerely
Wang Hong

以后写作英文作文时，请楼主一定注意使用英国人的语言习惯。避免出现诸如“left the university”，“find the job very hard”之类的错误。要做到这一点，需要经常去阅读英文文章，去留心他们的说话习惯，刻意的去学习。英语作为一门语言，需要下功夫去努力，不是一朝一夕能够提高的。但是，只要付出了，就会有收获。楼主现在不能心急。但是既然应试，就有应试的办法。楼主不妨去书店，买一点英文作文书，照着上面的模仿，考试时可以套用。但是，要真正提高英文能力，还需下功夫啊！

第一句话：不积极，像是应付。就算没找到好的工作也不要应付找工作嘛~~~~~~

建议用一些正式一点的句子，或者强调句。

第二局：目标表达不明。“about IT”？这个是很重要的信息哦，对于给收件人汇报来说。。。。。

“Gream job”这个词太可怕了，难道是..........“梦中的”？

最后一句：没有总结，没有思考，只是飞蛾扑火，也没有真正能够让人放心。好担心你呀~~~~~~

署名不够真诚

另外在提供相应信息方面，语言或者求职经验相对匮乏，并没有写到太多的内容，文章的内容分会很一般。没有汇报什么具体的情况，只是泛泛的吹吹牛而已。

朋友，你好

我暂时没空，晚上回来帮你改下吧

O(∩_∩)O！

Dear my parents,
I will graduate from the university in July.On the one hand ,there will be more than 6,000,000 graduates all over the country this year；
On the other hand ,a financial crisis broke out in the world.So it's very difficult to find out a good job.I attended lots of job fairs
but I haven't got my dream job so far.however,I won't give up .Please
believe me I am confident enough to face all kinds of challengs.I also
believe beautiful future belongs to as long as I work hard.
Best wishes,
Wang Hong

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