托福独立写作求批改

2025-03-01 11:59:19

推荐回答（3个）

回答1：

Nowadays,some people hold the opinion that working in the office is better than working
at home, while others prefer working at home. As for me, I cling to an
unshakeable belief that working in the office is the best choice.

Basic to any understanding of the benefits we can get from, working in the
office gains the most efficient result(s). On one hand, you’ll find it’s quite
convenient for you to communicate with your colleagues while you stuck in (on)
some problems. Thus you can get many useful ideas from your teammates to help
you come across them. On the other hand, working in the office provides a high
efficient atmosphere during your working time. You can easily concentrate on
what you are handing with. What’s more, (要加the) office can provides (provide) you any documents you need during the work.

Further lending credence to my position is that office also can be a place for
you to enlarge your circles of society. You can make friends with you (your) colleagues,
your customers or even you (your) boss. To be frankly (frank), those
friendships may be not as pure as the friends you’ve made in your childhood,
but as far as I am concerned, more friends will make you fell (feel) happier
during your working time. Maybe some day in the future, you can get help from
them, or maybe you can’t, but at least you can practice your communicating
skills with them.

Admittedly, working at home also has certain merits which deserve some words
here. For instance, working at home means you needn’t to face the bad traffic,
which means you will save a lot of time to enjoy your life. Also you’ll have
more time to share with your families. However, those (these) advantages may
cause new problems. Family members, especially children can easily divert your
attention from working. Although working at home can save time on (in) traffic,
but the low efficiency may leads (lead) to the result that your working time
become (becomes) longer and longer. Compared with the high efficiency during
working in the office, it pales.

Therefore, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with
each other to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any
single one of the (them), I reinforce my stand point (standpoint 是一个字) that working in the office
is between (应该是better 罢) than working at home

写得非常之好，只有少许错漏，已顺序替你更正好了(在括弧内)，若满意的话，请不要忘了采纳，谢谢你。

回答2：

末段 therefore 和 due to语义重复了，啰嗦。
括弧这种类型的文看着真心累，我就看最后一段了，实在没耐心看完
最后一句between than 亮了……
倒数第二句one of the …… 打丢了
互相关联形成一有机整体那句你不觉着太官方而且牵强么？
后面那句the 后面没打的语意不明，你想说的是什么？？？
你不用心写就别挂这么多分拿上来等着别人给你改。套模板可以有，照搬格式也可以有
但句子套不上的咱能不用不？
我只能说你写的不少，但阅卷基本就看开头结尾，你这尾收的够残的。别的部分我没看

回答3：

行啊
的萨菲收到该发生的法国萨菲噶请发到是

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托福独立写作 求批改

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